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So EMOtional

Post by Amber on May 28th 2010, 10:52 pm

Why couldn't you just
Stab
me through the heart?

was it just more
satisfying
to sit back and laugh as you do it slowly?

Or did you just enjoy seeing my
Pain
As you stabbed me in the heart?

And you ripped out my
love
for everything I used to do

You made me lose my
interest
in my old loves

Now i am just a mere
shadow
of my old self

I don't even
recognize
my face in the mirror anymore

It's scary. You've just made me so
Emotional
Now it feels good.

It feels good to see the blue blood turn
red
as it flows out of my pale skin

It feels like an
escape
that only me and my silver knife can know

It turned me away from the rest of
civilization
It made me a black streak in the sky of rainbows

Who am I? I was just left to
Wonder
and doubt myself as you walked away

Leaving me alone, all to
myself
not even bothering to say good bye.

You've just left me so Emotional


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Re: So EMOtional

Post by Desperate on May 28th 2010, 10:53 pm

Amber, I'm being dead serious now. You're an amazing and deep poet. You can relate. I love your poetry, and can;t wait to read more soon.
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Post by Amber on May 28th 2010, 10:54 pm

That means so much Des. Thank you.


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Post by WWLover on May 28th 2010, 10:54 pm

Amazing poem! As Dessie said, I can't wait to read more later.

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Post by *PoEtRy* on May 29th 2010, 3:05 pm

Beautiful.
I'd give some advice and criticz, but I don't have any.
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Post by Amber on May 29th 2010, 4:16 pm

aw, thanks so much Smiley


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Post by ••Belighaslarn•• on May 29th 2010, 4:30 pm

Deep...I love.
5/5, great job Ambie.
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Post by OMGITSDAVID on May 29th 2010, 10:21 pm


It feels good to see the blue blood turn
red
as it flows out of my pale skin

That is my favorite line, it's so poetic and deep.

11/10
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Post by 0000000005 on June 1st 2010, 9:36 pm

That's so pretty! 10/10

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