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Who would of thought?

Post by sashakiki on March 30th 2010, 3:32 am

Chapter 1



Who would of thought that the biggest fight in the world had started off in a classroom? Well thats were it did right there in my class too! But before i go on i should probaly tell you my name. My name is Sky Marrison. ok back to the story. Wel it started off like anyouther friday.

Hey sky called my friend brintany. i looked up startled to see what seemed to be a bit of a stand off beteween the teachers. My friend took me behing the corner and whispered what had happened. Well it seems that what happened went a bit like this.... Ok students called our teacher Mrs.Star who had some test sheets on her desk. But before she could say anything else she was interuted by a man in a suite coming rushing into the room and started shouting about something or outher about cleaning and tests. Soon the outhers got involved as well. It seems that Mr. Moar wanted the girls of the class to do the cleaning first and for the boys to do the tests first. So thats how it started i whispered think how inasne it was for a grown man to be fighting over cleaning but than again how was my teacher any better? she was fighting too. I went back around the corner and looked at everything. Wow i have alot of work too do i thought to my self and got to work.

I grabbed the first kid i saw who had some dark brown hair that was somewhere at her sholders and had some greyish bluesish eyes. Ok kid i said to her. I know what happened now would you mind telling me whats the big deal with cleaning and tests and besides why should the boys be able to do tests first and whay cant we do it together? ok whats your name kid i said a little out of breath oh well my name is Alice said Alice looking at her shoes. Hey dont worry im not mad but i need your help. I whispered my idea into her ear. She smiled and ran off.
Chapter 2

Once everything was in order i went and got some of my outher friends. Now does everyone know what there doing i asked to all the kids who were looking at me. To be honest i wasnt surprised i had my black hair up in a high ponytail and my clothes werent very leader like. Just than a girl whos name i think is Betty stood up. Ha your a laugh she said with a laugh. I bet i could do so mutch better than little skyey here. Her gang also stood up and they all cheered. Uggg i thought as the final bell rang. I really hope this cools down over the weekend i whispered under my breath as everyone started leaving but as i left i could still hear the shouting of the teachers.
When i woke up Monday i didnt know what to think. I wanted to know if the teachers had made up or not but when i headed don the stairs something for once didnt surprise me. My mom and dad were arguing about something. My parents have been doing this a long time and just last week they told me that they were getting a divorce so i dont really like being at home when there around as all you can hear is shouting which is a guess a bit like school was on friday. After having some ceral and getting ready for school. I walked out of the house not being noticed very mutch. When i did get to school i couldnt believe what i was seeing. Now all the schools teachers were in the cofrence room and were arguing! When i got to class room i saw that now the girls had turned on the boys and had the first room and the boys had the outher. How the heck had this happened over sutch a little argument. Finally the bell rang and the boys had to come back in but when the teachers had come in they didnt have happy expressens on there face.
Chapter 3

Maybe its just blown over i thought as the teachers came in.But to my surpise it wasnt. It seems that now students split in groups of boys and girls but since theres some more girls than boys we had to choose 1 girl to go with the boys. No one put there hand up and finally i did. I was escorted over to the boys which was a bit strange but after all that was straitened up i had to go to a different room with the boys and a male teache. When we got in our teacher told us to get our text books out and start getting ready for a test.

What was going on with all this i mean A TEST not even 5 minutes after being seperated. Why were the teachers doing this to us? I mean we havent done anything and its there stupid argument. I didnt say anything when the test was passed out. i did all the questions and just sat in my seat. I didnt know what to do i mean like whats a girl suppose to do but believe me at that time i didnt know what was going to happen next.
Chapter 4

After the test the teacher went out of the room to get some coffee. All the boys went into small clusters and i was left alone. Finally i just started drawing some stuff on a piece of paper and wasnt really bothered by anyone. When the teacher came back in he said that we were going outside for science and were going to look at fish and outher animals in the forest and for that we needed to get into pairs. All the boys got into an argumant over who would be my partner and finally a boy named Tom was chosen. We were the first to go out and we started talking about everything. He said that he didnt want this fight to happen like all the outher boys. I thought that was quite strange as all the outher boys seemed to love that the boys and the girls were seperated.

After about an hour all the groups were pulled back in and we saw that some reporters were at the school. I guess they caught word about the big fight this school has been having but who knows? Anyway one by one we were called in to tell them what we thought. I told them exactly what i really thought. That this was a stupid thing the teachers were doing and maybe the teachers should just do their argument without getting us kids involved. I guess that took the reporters by surprise beacuse they took a picture of me and wrote some stuff down. After that i was able to leave and tom went in after me.
Chapter 5

After maybe just like an hour or so all the kids were called back down to the audtorium were all the teachers went on about all the things we werent doing and how maybe if we had tryed hareder this wouldnt have happened. Well i didnt say this out loud but in my head i was thinking "why are you blaming us its you who should be the ones getting yelled at just beacause your the ones that are causing all the trouble not us.

After we were all chewed out for something we didnt do we were sent back in for more studdies and stuff. Of course after awhile we were let out and me and tim went into the woods. We went into a clearing and with our note pads we started letters. I wrote mine to the head of school councile this is what mine said:
Dear Mr. Smith
i would like to tell you about what is happing at my school. All the teachers are in a big fight agaist boys and girls but the worse theve done is dragged us kids into the middle. Theve made us seperate from the girls (i was chosen to go over to the boys side) but to be honest i jsut want this all to stop. Please mr. smith if you can will you please come and sort out our teachers?
from,
Sky meddow


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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Sally123 on March 30th 2010, 2:46 pm

I like it so far! I hope you continue it!
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Xarver on March 30th 2010, 3:22 pm

It's... strange. I could hardly understand it, sorry to say, you need to improve on your grammar. Smiley
Other than that it seems a little short. Sky Marrison shouldn't have to describe herself, because otherwise it doesn't seem like it's a story. Your story should feel natural; if you were the main character you probably wouldn't describe yourself in your own diary but give hints and info about that character as the story goes along.
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by sashakiki on March 30th 2010, 3:49 pm

oh um ok i will... Re-edited and new chapter up
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Amber on April 2nd 2010, 10:22 pm

Great job. Hoping for another


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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Fred100 on April 3rd 2010, 4:14 am

Nice Winking
I Like it grin
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by sashakiki on April 7th 2010, 10:18 am

New chappie up!
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by sashakiki on April 12th 2010, 2:17 pm

new chapter up and can anyone give me ideas for chapter 5?
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Snobothehobo on April 14th 2010, 4:12 pm

I like the story, but it's a little hard to follow. When you want to punctuate dialog (characters speaking), here's how it's done.

I said, "I like candy."
"I like candy," I said.
"What are you doing?" I asked.
I asked, "What are you doing?"
"No!" I exclaimed.

Good luck! Smiley
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by ••Belighaslarn•• on April 19th 2010, 4:01 pm

Nice job, I like it so far grin
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by sashakiki on April 19th 2010, 4:42 pm

plz someone ideas!!! or i cant continue
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Re: Who would of thought?

Post by Nikki on April 21st 2010, 3:40 pm

Great story!

Maybe you could change the story into a complete plot change....Maybe like you take a dream or something else that you thought of and you could change into the story or something like that.
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